Dear my pen with a rabbit doll on it,
I got you as a gift from my sister's friend's mother this summer. I know she has a wonderful shop with joyful stuff, pretty to see and tasty to eat. I'm so thankful to her for giving me such a beautiful thing like you. You, my pen, you know how beautiful you are?
You are light brown in color, light as chocolate milk with more milk than chocolate. The doll rabbit on top is almost as big as my own hand. Red, yellow and green flowers are all over your body. You also have ribbon which is the color of chocolate milk with more chocolate than milk, and a heart on your stomach is lighter than it.
You also wouldn't know how delightful you are to study with. Your ink is black which is easy to see. You are a bit heavy but that sometimes that even helps me to have better handwriting. I will study hard with you.
You, my pen with a rabbit doll on it, goodnight in my pencil case. See you tomorrow. You know how precious you are to me. Goodbye.
Love,
Dalin
Dalin,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very descriptive ode, you did a good job describing your pen. However, you should use more personifications to make your pen like a human.
Hi!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your descriptive ode to your pen. You have to try to use more personifications to bring human qualities to an inanimate object like your pen. Keep working hard~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)